Natalie, this is a great analytical paper. I like your opening the most. It is eye-catching by illustrating a scene of seeing 9/11 attack on TV. This is essential because you talked about 9/11 attack and its significance on Cayce afterwards. Your quotes are strong and persuasive but you might have to elaborate more on the longer quotes and how it fits to your thesis. For example, you quoted “simulacra of simulacra of simulacra of simulacra. A diluted tincture of Ralph Lauren, who had himself diluted the glory days of Brooks Brothers, who themselves had stepped on the product of Jermyn Street and Savile Row, flavoring their ready-to-wear with liberal lashings of polo kit and regimental stripes. But Tommy surely is the null point, the black hole. There must be some Tommy Hilfiger event horizon, beyond which it is impossible to be more derivative, more removed from the source, more devoid of soul.” from the book to support that Cayce’s allergy toward logos is implying the lack of authenticity in today’s world. Firstly, I think providing this entire quote is unnecessary. You can just quote some key words to present Cayce’s allergy. Secondly, I think you can elaborate more on identity and globalization. You can compare Tommy with the Rickson’s jacket. Overall, your paper is very good. It is structurally organized and supported with strong evidence.
Natalie's Second Paper Draft / Discussion
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